For a first draft, this isn't too bad. You open up with a sound bite which is good but it is a little long. Your points are ok and in a logical order. The story makes sense and it's looking like Misha is your main character. Your sound bites for each point make sense and back them up so that's good. However I do notice that you've only interviewed the owner and a co-worker. No interviews with customers who can attest to how good their food is or how they spread the aloha spirit? Without anyone else we have to take their word for it. It would be good to get some customer interviews in there or even possibly the farmer that supplies them their locally grown produce. The farmer will probably be harder to get but the customers should be easy. Your VOs need the most work as they aren't very strong. Even your first VO is wrong. Misha said so herself that she didn't start the business, someone else did and she bought it so the way you've worded it is wrong. That needs to be fixed. Your second point is supposed to be about why she runs her own business, to have flexibility in her schedule yet your VO talks about she's made improvements to the business. The sound bites that follow match your point but not the VO. Your VOs for points 4, 5 and your closing all need more work. Your closing states that the business is growing with aloha and support from the community. Where exactly in your script do you have a sound bite that supports that statement? They don't even mention wanting to grow their business once in any sound bite you have. Let's work on this some more. It's ok, but still needs work.
Write something about yourself. No need to be fancy, just an overview.