I love the opening shot but the audio is too loud and it's crackling and is distorted. Unfortunately because of that problem, you won't be able to use that unless you can see if you can make that less noticeable. You need more close ups as I don't recall seeing hardly any. Remember that we need to see people ENJOYING the bon dance. The shots you showed us doesn't convey that they are HAPPY to be there. One of your interviewees even said what's important is the joy that it brings to people. Watch out for b-roll that jumps in and out of focus and moves. Watch your head room on b-roll. Your voiceover needs to be redone too. It sounds like you're in a bathroom. Sorry, I know this sounds like there are a lot of things wrong with your project and that's not the case. I think you have a great story here and most of your interviews are shot well. You just have to more carefully choose your b-roll. Keep working on it!
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