I think the script is much better at explaining how to actually play the game. Your pacing is pretty good and your audio is clear. I would like to see maybe a photo if we can find one, of what the lava rock Konane looks like. Did you contact the Kauai Museum yet to see if they had any photos we could use? You also need more closeups. Remember that they asked to see the face of the person playing the game? We don't see any faces of the two people playing. It would be great to see the reaction of the person who won instead of hands that are moving all around. We also need to keep the location at one place. You jump from the grass to the library. I really like the grass location better as it fits more of how the Hawaiians would play it. I know it's harder to film outside but we have nice grass all over this campus and I'm sure you can find a spot to do it. Good to great! We also need to break up our shots more. They don't always match your voiceover (the jumping part) and we need more close ups. We really do need a high angle shot. Let's try to set up a high angle shot outside on the grass and film the entire game being played from start to finish. Then you can cut to that closeup whenever you need to see the board from a better angle. Seeing the board from the side isn't the greatest way to view it.
Your project page is missing the original video and the original script and the new script. Let's get all of those things posted so we can see the progress of this piece. It's getting better but there are still things we can improve. Nice job!
3 points - B
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