This has clearly gotten better with each revision. The script is done well and is much easier to follow. The voice overs are done well as words are spoken clearly and the pacing is not too fast nor is it too slow. At times the voice overs sound flat. Work on making it sound upbeat for the entire project. The shots are what need the most work. You have jump cuts here and many shots are out of focus. When using DSLRs you really have to work on your focusing to make sure your subject is entirely in focus. Moving this outside is much better than having it indoors. Overall a pretty good project but it definitely could be improved. Let's work on these things for the next project! 2.8 points
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